NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 4, 2007 17:35:00 GMT -5
Hi! I am writing a fanfic for Bottle Rocket, and I'd thought I'd post it for you all to read. I will be writing it in 'script' (courier new) font, like how scripts look. :-) I have to say though, if you haven't watched the movie it might include spoilers, and might be just a bit confusing. ;-) I hope you enjoy it!
Chapter 1. Released.
Anthony and Inez stood by the door of the jail, waiting for Bob to come. He and her glanced at each other, smiled, and turned towards the noise in front of them. A car was rolling down the road, it pulled into the parking lot. The car parked, and the door opened. Out stepped Bob. He looked the same as he had two years ago, so did Anthony and Inez, except Inez had a bulging belly as the baby inside her grew. Bob trotted over to the two, smiling. "Ready?" Anthony asked. "Ready as I'll ever be." Bob replied. All three of them entered the jail. Inside stood a man in baggy clothes, talking to a shorter man. The short man had his back turned to Anthony, just like the tall man did. The short man had a ski cap on, while the tall one has ear length blonde hair. Anthony grabbed the tall mans shoulder and hauled him around, giving him a huge hug. Dignan hugged him back, surprised and happy. "Anthony!" He said. "I've missed you so much!" They stood there and hugged each other for five more minutes, then Anthony let Dignan go. "Good to see you man." Dignan said to Bob, grabbing him and giving him a hug to, though this one didn't last as long as Anthonys. He then gave Inez a hug. Anthony glanced over at the short guy he had seen before, and realised it was none other then Kumar. "Its good to see you, Jerry." Inez was saying, as Anthony walked over and grabbed Dignans arm. He pulled him away from the other two. "Whats Kumar doing here, Dignan?" He asked. Dignan smiled his usual smile. "C'mon, man. Just be glad I'm out of this place. Its like a prison." He laughed. Anthony smiled slightly. "C'mon, I'll tell you when we get to Bobs." Dignan said.
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Post by Remi on Mar 4, 2007 18:59:30 GMT -5
Nice work, Beauty!  Can't wait to read more!
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 4, 2007 19:40:32 GMT -5
Thank you. :-)
Chapter 2. Car Ride Back.
Bob drove the car down the highway, on his way to his home. Inez sat up front, letting Dignan and Anthony sit in the back together. A upbeat rolling stones song rang from the radio. "This is great." Dignan was saying. "This is great, to be out y'know? I missed it." Anthony nodded. "I missed you. Its going to be great." Dignan nodded, and began a story of his cellmate Carl, and how he got into jail. "So, after he stole the tractor, Carl kind of just went crazy. He got caught though." Dignan said as Bob stopped the car in his driveway.
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 6, 2007 12:02:07 GMT -5
Chapter three! Enjoy.
Chapter 3. The letter.
They all sat down in Bobs kitchen. Dignan leaned back in his chair and whistled. "Look at all this new stuff, man. This is nice." Bob twiddled his thumbs as he looked at Anthony, who was looking at Dignan as Dignan looked about the house. Bob, who also had saw Kumar, got the idea and said: "C'mon Inez, I want to show you my backyard." "I have already seen it, Bob." Inez winked. "I haven't." Dignan said, getting up. "Wait Dignan, let Bob and Inez go. I need to ask you something." Anthony said, grabing Dignans arm and pushing him backdown. Inez got the picture, and agreed to go see the backyard. "So, Dignan." Anthony breathed. "Whats up with Kumar?" Dignan sighed, and looked out the window, looking like he was making up his mind. Suddenly he got really excited and jumped of the chair, and dug into his pocket. He pulled out a folded piece of paper, opened it, and lay it in front of Anthony. "Read it." He said. Anthony looked at Dignan, then grabbed the paper. He looked at Dignan. "Kumar gave this to you?" He asked. Dignan nodded, overjoyed. "Read it." Anthon began reading. It read:
Dear Dignan, Mr. A. Henry has requested to see You at same place at 7:30 AM, January 8th. Bring whoever. Don't be late, got a great plan. - AppleJack.
Anthony slowly took his eyes from the letter. "Mr. Henry?" Dignan nodded. "Yeah, Anthony! This is great, Mr. Henry wants me back! He probably has a job for me, maybe another robbery." Dignans eyes were lighting up. "Dignan! Mr. Henry robbed Bobs house!" Anthony gasped. "I can't believe this, your not going are you?" Dignan's happiness slowly faded. "Of course. You and I." Anthony shook his head. "Dignan." Was all he said. "C'mon, maybe this time it'll work out." Dignan pressed, he started to get excited again. "C'mon, Anthony, c'mon man." Anthony looked into his eyes. "We'll go, Dignan. But, if anything happens-" "Yes!" Dignan screamed, pumping his fist. "Yes, yes yes!"
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Post by texasgal on Mar 6, 2007 13:22:04 GMT -5
Good job, Neds! My hat is off to all the great writers this forum is blessed to have.
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 6, 2007 14:41:35 GMT -5
Thanks. C",
Chapter 4. Convincing Inez.
At eight Anthony and Inez finally left Bobs. Bob had agreed to let Dignan bunk with him at his house for awhile, untill Dignan could get a job. If only he knew what type of job Dignan has in mind. Anthony thought. In the car, Anthony slowly poundered what to say to Inez. His driving showed that he was troubled. "Anthony?" Inez spoke up, "You don't look to well. What is wrong?" Anthony shrugged, then shook his head, then shrugged again. "Its Dignan." He said finally. "Oh," Inez said. She moved her hand off her stomach onto Anthonys lap. "He wants to see Mr. Henry again," Anthony told her. "he wants me to come with him." Inez sat up straighter, and looked at Anthony deeply. "Anthony!" She said. "Mr. Henry, isn't he the one who-" "Robbed Bobs house? Yes. But, Dignan seems convinced that nothings' wrong with him." Anthony muttered. "He got a letter from him, saying he wants to have Dignan visit him on the 8th." "Thats three days from now." Inez said. "What are you going to do?" "Well, I promised to go with him." Anthony said. There was a long silence in the car. Finally Inez spoke. "I do not think you should go, Anthony." "I know, but I promised." Anthony said. "It means alot to Dignan." Inez nodded. "Be carefull." She whispered. "Don't worry, I will." Anthony replied. Inez looked out the window with a frown on her face.
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Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 7, 2007 11:51:42 GMT -5
Next chapter.
Chapter 5. Mr. Henry.
Dignan and Anthony pulled up to the big building. They had been here befor to see Mr. Henry, Anthony didn't think they'd ever be back. Dignan jumped out of the car as soon as it was stopped. "C'mon, man." Was all he said as he trotted up to the front door. It was locked. He quickly looked up, and stepped back, just in case. No Mr.Henry. Anthony got out and knocked on the door, just to be greeted by, this time, a bucket full of water. "Ugh!" Anthony groaned, looking up to see Mr. Henry looking down laughing. Dignan started laughing also. "Ho, Mr. Henry!" He said, waving. "Dignan, my man! Anthony! Be right down!" Mr. Henry shouted happily down. Very soon the door opened and Mr. Henry, AppleJack, and Kumar came out. He hugged Dignan, and patted Anthony on the back. "Nice to see you again! Come on in."
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 9, 2007 12:09:54 GMT -5
Chapter 6! :-)
Chapter 6. Jude And The plan.
Dignan and Anthony followed Mr. Henry to the third floor of the building. "Me and Mr. Henry have been talking 'bout this for three months already." Dignan explained. Digan was excited, Anthony could feel it. When they reached the 3rd floor, they met a beautifull young woman. Her hair was short and spiky below the ears. She sat smoking, when Mr. Henry came in she quickly put the light out and greeted him. Anthony looked around the room, on a table lay loads of paper and pens, plenty of envelopes and a stack of money. He looked at Dignan, and was surprised to see Dignans eyes were on the woman. "Dignan, Anthony, this is Jude. She want's to help with this misson." "Misson?" Anthony said. "What mission?" Mr. Henry and Dignan ignored Anthony. "Hello." Dignan said to Jude, shaking her hand. Jude smiled at him. "Hi." She replied. "What mission?" Anthony repeated. "Anthony, we got this plan. We're going to rob Hickinly again." Dignan replied. "This time though, we got Jude." He got extremely excited. "She has this plan, this really good plan." He ran to the table, rummaged through the papers, grabbed one, then gave it to Anthony. "See?" He said, pointing. "We're going to go through here, get the money here, and then we'll get out here. No worries, no problems. Jude's gonna make sure nobody can get us, at all." He looked at Anthony, smiling toothly. "No way." Anthony breathed. "No way, Digan. Do you want to go to jail again?" Dignan's eyes narrowed. "C'mon man, it'll work this time." "Dignan..Man." Anthony said, he put his hands to his head and walked towards the window. "I can't, man. I have Inez now, and a baby on the way." Dignan came up to him. "We.Can.Do.It." Dignan said, putting pressue on each word. "Judes got a plan." Anthony looked at Dignan, slowly putting his hands down. Dignans eyes were pleading. "C'mon, Anthony." Dignan said. Anthony shook his head. "I can't believe I'm saying this-" "Yeah!" Dignan whooped, he ran over and high fived Mr. Henry and Jude.
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 11, 2007 18:11:24 GMT -5
I hope you don't mind me posting again. I finished the whole fanfic today. I worked really hard on it. I am going to post 3 chapters right now, tell me what you think of it. ;-)
Chapter 7. Getting Bob to join.
Anthony and Dignan left Mr. Henrys and went straight to Bobs. "If we're going to do this, Dignan, Bobs got to be in." Anthony said. Dignan frowned and looked out the window, he grunted something but that was all he said untill they got to Bobs. When they entered the house, Bob was in a great mood. He greeted them, and offered them drinks. They all sat down in the den and sipped their drinks, talking about their lifes. Finally Anthony told Bob about the plan. Bob spit out his water, soaking Dignan, who glared at Bob with deep disgust. "What? I am not, repeat, not, going to do this again!" Bob exclaimed. "Anthony, what about Inez?" He turned to Dignan. "Your going to wind up back in jail again!" Dignan just rolled his eyes and turned away from Bob. "We might have a better chance at this, Bob." Anthony purseuded. "Theres this girl Jude, she's got a really well planned plan for the heist. She has escape plans, and everything." "Just like Dignan did." Bob replied, upset. "And look what happened! I will not spend time in jail, Anthony. I don't want any of us to go through that." " 'I don't want any of us to go through that', oh shut it up, Man." Dignan mocked. "C'mon, we need you." "No." Bob said. "I refuse to be apart of it." Anthony sat back. "Alright, Bob. If thats what you want." Dignan glared at Bob and stood up. "C'mon, Anthony. Lets go get a burger." He and Anthony headed towards the door. "Wait, guys." They turned, Bob was walking to them. "Look, I really don't want you guys to do this." Dignan sighed loudly. "Bob, you stupid-" Bob interupted him, "But I can't stop you. I'll join in, but I get full share of the cut." Anthony smiled and patted Bob on the back. "Yeah, thats great Bob. I'm sure Dignans okay with that." But Dignans response was nothing but a deep glare.
Chapter 8. Jude explains the plan.
Anthony, Dignan, Bob and the rest of Mr. Henrys gang sat around the table as Jude began to explain the plan. She picked up a picture of the storage, then a map she drew herself. "Now, heres the new office. We need to get here." Jude said, she pointed from one end of the map to the other. She tapped the middle. "These are the freezers, we need to steer clear of them. Theres no exit." Anthony noticed that Dignan flinched a little as she said that. His eyes never left the papers she was pointing at, nor her. "When we get the money, we have to bail to the nearest exits. They are marked with big X's. Remember that, I will give each of you a map." Jude continued, she handed each of them a small map. "Now, the only ones doing this robbery are me, Dignan, Anthony, Bob and Kumar. Mr. Henry and Applejack are leaving out of town tonight, they need to do some buisness." Dignan nodded, Bob stared at Mr. Henry. If looks could kill. "If you rob my house again.." Bob said to Mr. Henry. "Lookit, Roberto." Mr. Henry said, leaning forwards with a glare in his eyes. "Didn't ya just hear Jude? I'm leaving town. I have buisness with an old friend to attend to." He slapped Bobs shoulders hard. "I won't touch your house. I promise." Bob rubbed his shoulder, and stared straight ahead. He once and awhile side glanced at Mr. Henry. Anthony looked at the map. "Whats 'A', 'J', 'D', 'K', 'B'?" He asked. Jude sighed. "Thats us. The letters of our first names. Now listen, thats where we should be at all times, got it? If anybody moves out of place, or leaves their station, unless nessicary, they'll hear from me and Mr. Henry." Jude threatened. Anthony nodded silently. Dignan smiled brightly, oviously excited. "Awesome, man. Awesome." Was all he said. Jude smiled at him. "We'll get this done saturday, Mr. Henry'll be back sunday. We'll tell him how it went then." Everyone nodded. Saturday was only a week away.
Chapter 9. Leaving.
Monday morning. 3:28 AM. Mr Henry threw both of his bags into the back of his car. Applejack stood close by watching. Mr. Henry slammed the car door shut, and lit a cigar. The glow of the cigar made a tiny circle of light. Applejack shook his head. "I don't know if we should really mess with him." Applejack said, worried. Mr. Henry laughed gaily. "He shouldn't have messed with us." He was talking about Rowboat, once one of his best friends. Rowboat had, after robbing Bobs house with Mr. Henry, skipped town. He had come back earlier that month and robbed Mr. Henrys own home, taking most of Mr. Henrys vaulubles. "Lets get out of here." Both he and Applejack jumped into the car, leaving nothing but dust.
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Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 27, 2007 23:24:29 GMT -5
Sorry I haven't posted this in a while. Here's the next two chapters, do you guys like it?
Chapter 10. Tuesday afternoon. 3:45 PM
Dignan and Anthony sat in front of the counter of the burger place, discussing the plan. Bob paced back and forth behind them. Jude came in suddenly, stopped in the doorway, looked around. When she spotted Dignan, she smiled happily and trotted over to him. "Dignan, about the storage.." She began, but Anthony cut her off. "Whats wrong with the storage, Jude?" He seemed worried. "Is it shut down, or has it got higher secruity?" "Neither," Jude replied. "its just that, I dunno if its really the right...place to rob, y'know?" Bob nodded. "I agree. It didn't work the first time, why try it again?" "Ah, Bob, Jude." Dignan said. "It'll be perfect, just perfect. Nothin'll go wrong, beleave me." Jude looked into Dignans eyes, which were sparkling and happy. She couldn't help but smile. "Okay Dignan." She said. She got up and began to leave. "Hey Jude!" Dignan suddenly called, she turned. "I-I like the color in your hair." Jude smiled toothly. "Thank you, Digan." She said, rubbing the red colored ends of her spikey hair. Dignan smiled back, then turned to Anthony, who was smiling along with Bob. "What?" "Nothing." Anthony replied, shaking his head.
Chapter 11. Thursday 5:58 PM. Hinkley Cold Storage.
Dignan and Jude hid behind some bushes, watching the two men across the lot move items in a big white van. Jude was looking through her binoculars, and Dignan was watching her. Bob and Anthony hid in some more bushes, on the other side of the lot. "Y'know, I hope this robbery goes allright." Jude said. "It will, man. It will." Dignan reasured her. He stared across and lot and suddenly jumped. "What is he doing?!" He yelped. Jude looked at him, then across the lot and held in a scream. Anthony was talking to one of the people in Hinkley cold storage!
"So, what does it take to get a job here?" Anthony was saying to one of the new workers. So far he had found out that the last workers had quit, because they did not need to be harassed by anymore crazy kids with smoke granades. At that, Anthony had chuckled, and the man had given him a strange look. "Well, you must be over 16 and know your way around. And know how to handle the place, y'know?" The guy answered Anthonys question. "Okay, okay." Anthony replied, nodding. "What are the times? Y'know, closing, opening?" "Monday's we started at 5:00AM, leave at 7:00PM. Same for tuesday. Wendsday, 8AM to 5PM. Thursday and friday, 7AM to 6PM. Saturday is 7AM to 10PM, Sundays we have free." The guy said. "Thanks." Anthony replied, shifting his weight. "Its nice to know. Thank you for the infomation, g'bye." Anthony turned and walked over to Bob, only to be confronted by Dignan and Jude. "What the heck were you doing over there, man?" Dignan snapped, dragging Anthony behind the bushes. "I was getting infomation, like closing times and such." Anthony snapped back. Suddenly Dignans expression changed. "Wow! I would have never thought of that. Now, thats what I call quick thinking. See Bob, you could really learn alot from Anthony here." Bob glared at Dignan. "What are the times for saturdays?" Bob asked Anthony. "Uh," Anthony tried to remember the time. The guy had said then all so quickly. "Its...Uh, 7:00AM to 6:00PM." Anthony finally said, sure of his answer. "Great job!" Jude said. "We'll start the robbery around 6:10, then. They'll be gone."
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Post by oceanninny on Mar 27, 2007 23:33:38 GMT -5
superb! wow you are talented!
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NedsBeauty
Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 27, 2007 23:37:10 GMT -5
 Oh, well, thank you!  I'll post one last chapter tonight. Chapter 12. Friday 11:32 PM.
Anthony lay in bed, looking at the ceiling. Suddenly there was a small bang at his window, he looked at it. A small rock hit the window, giving off another small bang. He got up, carefully so he didn't wake up Inez, who was sleeping quietly next to him, and opened the window. A small rock suddenly hit him square in the forhead. "Gah! Dignan!" He hissed, looking down two stories. Dignan stood, holding a small bag full of rocks, waving up to Anthony. "C'mere! Anthony, Ka-caw! C'mere Anthony!" He was whispering. Anthony sighed, and called down: "Hold on, Dignan. One minute." He grabbed his bathrobe, and exited his home. Outside, Dignan was no where to be found. "Dignan?" Anthony softly called out. "Dignan?" "ANTHONY!" Somebody screamed from behind him. Anthony screamed and spun around. Dignan was hidden in some bushes, dressed in his usal white oufit. "Dignan you crazy-" Anthony began, but Dignan quickly ran up to him and covered his mouth. "Shhh." Dignan said, and lead Anthony over to the other side of the yard. It was dark, but apparantley Dignan had been there for a while because there was a flashlight, a bag of chips, and four cans of soda. "Sit down." Dignan whisered. Anthony did as he was told. "Dignan, what do you think kidnapping me?" Anthony spat, upset about what just happened. "Anthony, I think I'm falling for Jude." Dignan said quickly.
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Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
"I put it on some peppermint dental floss, in case you wanted to wear it as a necklace."
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 29, 2007 17:45:57 GMT -5
Here is the next two parts! :-)
Chapter 13. Anthonys backyard. 11:48 PM.
"What? Yeah, Dignan. I know." Anthony replied, half smiling. "What?" Dignan sputtered. "What?" "I know, you can just tell by looking at ya." Anthony told him. Dignan glared at Anthony, then looked at his house. He stared for a while, Anthony began to wonder if he should leave or not. After about ten minutes, Dignan suddenly moved and said to Anthony: "Do you think she feels the same way about me?" Anthony was taken off guard. Dignan wasen't like this. He didn't care what people thought, Dignan is crazy. Anthony didn't think he could feel the way he did. "W-well, possibly. You, well, just got to ask her y'know." Anthony told him. Dignan nodded and cupped his chin in his hands, sitting indian style on the grass. Again, he paused and didn't move for a while. Anthony looked at his watch, 12:13 AM. He need sleep if he was going to do that Robbery tomorrow. "You really love her, don't you?" Anthony asked suddenly. Dignan jumped, and nearly fell over. "What?" "I said, you really love her, don't you? Her meaning Jude." Anthony said. "What? No, no, no, man. No." Dignan said quickly, he stood up and collected his items. "No...no...no.." He kept repeating, he stood up straight and looked Anthony in the eye. "I have no idea what you are talking about, my friend. I need to go, we need sleep if we're doing that robbery tomorrow." Then he ran off. Anthony sat in the grass for a while, trying to figure out what just happened. Then, at 12:30 he got up and went back to bed.
Chapter 14. Hinkley Cold Storage. 5:57 PM.
The group sat behind the same bushes, watching a group of men jump into a white van. There van, which was green, lay hidden in the side of the storage. They all had on Yellow Jumpsuits, Dignans idea. "There they go." Dignan whispered happily. Anthony noticed he sat right next to Jude. "Everyone, this is it. We got to be ready." Jude said. Anthony suddenly got very unsure. "Lets not do this, guys." He said. "WHAT?" Jude exclaimed. " 'Lets not do it?' What the heck are you talking about, Anthony? We're hear, we're doing it! If we didn't, what would Mr. Henry say? Huh?" "I-I..Uh..Look," Anthony mumbled. "No, you look." Jude said standing up, putting her hands on her hips. "We're doing this today, and I mean it, Anthony!" "But-" Anthony whispered. "I don't care what you think. I don't care!" Jude yelled. She picked up her binoculars, and her duffle bag and moved over to the other side of the bushes. Anthony, who was kind of embarassed by being told off by Jude, sat backwards and looked straight ahead. Bob let out a low whistle, and patted Antonys shoulder. Dignan looked at Jude. His expression on his face was mixed. Kind of afraid, kind of unsure, and kind of happy. Kumar just slepted in his place behind Bob.
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Anthony's Spanish Tutor

Keeper of Ned's Red Cap
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Post by NedsBeauty on Mar 31, 2007 15:55:36 GMT -5
Heres the next couple of parts. They are begining the robbery. This took me along time to write. These last few parts are my complete favorite parts of the whole story, because I completely got lost in the characters and the story line.
Chapter 15. Begining The Robbery. 6:10 PM.
The groups watches suddenly went off at the same time, they all quickly turned off the beeping. "Lets get lucky." Dignan said seriously. They all headed into the storage.
Inside, Jude quickly gave each of them maps and walkie-talkies. "Dignan and I'll get the money, Kumar, get to your postion. Anthony, help him then get to the look-out. Bob, you just get to your look-out. Go, go go!" And they all took off.
Chapter 16. Anthony & Kumar.
Anthony and Kumar rushed to the elevator, Anthonys stomach felt at least 50 pounds. They both got into the elevator and got to the 2nd floor. "Kumar, go over there and look for anybody, okay?" Anthony said, pointing. "Okay." Kumar replied, and waddled over to his post. Anthony quickly started the elevator again and rushed to the roof. Ontop of the building he had a clear view of the whole parking lot and around the storage. He picked up his walkie talkie. "Beatles, Scarecrow? You there?" Anthony said into his talkie. "Here. Bird Dog, you get there alright?" Jude said, her codename Beatles. "Yeah. I'm up here, Pallana's at his post. I don't know about Bob, I mean, Jackknife." "Okay. We're here, we should be done soon. Keep a good eye out. Over 'n out, Bird Dog." Jude said. Anthony sighed.
Chapter 17. Bob.
Bob quickly ran to his post. He was by the loading docks. He looked around the whole place, empty. Which was good. He checked his watch, 6:20. He then grabbed his walkie talkie. "Bird Dog? Beatles? Pallana?" He said into the talkie. He voice was shaky. "Here." Came two voices, it was Jude and Anthony. "Good. Thank God. I didn't want this thing to be broken again." Bob sighed. "Where are you? At your post?" Jude asked quickly. "Yeah yeah. Everythings fine." Bob replied, looking around again. "Beatles, I-I...I don't know about this." "JackKnife, stop it! You can't do this now, okay? We done have time....DIGNAN! What the heck...no, no the other one!" Jude said. "Whats wrong?" Anthony asked. "Did something go wrong?" "No. Dignan just...nevermind, just keep an eye out, okay?" Jude replied. "Right." Bob and Anthony both said.
Chapter 18. The van.
Kumar stood looking out the window. A big white van came rolling by the storage, it stopped, and a group of people came rolling out. It wasen't near Bobs post at all. Kumar had a thought of telling everybody else, but as he picked up his talkie he let out a small yawn. He dropped his talkie, which hit the ground and split in two, and slowly sunk into a small sleep.
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Post by NedsBeauty on Apr 3, 2007 12:51:28 GMT -5
Here are the next parts.
Chapter 19. Jude and Dignan.
Jude tried picking the lock to the safe, as Dignan looked over the map and most of the weapons. "Darnnit!" Jude said, stepping back from the safe. "Okay, Dignan, give me that one lock picking kit." Dignan gave it to her, and picked up his gun, rubbing it affectionaly. Jude spat and threw the kit down. "You try!" She sputtered, walking away from it. Dignan smiled and ran to the safe. He picked the lock, which amazed him. "I got it!" He gasped. Jude ran over and opened the safe, inside were many bills. "Quick, get the bag." Jude told him. He grabbed the bag and they both started shoving bills inside. Dignan grabbed the walkie talkie. "JackKnife? Pallana? Bird Dog? We got the money! Lets get out of here, now, now now!" Nobody responded. "Anybody? C'mon!" Suddenly there was static and Anthony said quickly. "Dignan! DIGNAN!" "What man?!" Dignan asked, worried. "A van just pulled up and people are coming in!!" Anthony yelled. "WHAT?!" Dignan gasped. He and Jude looked at each other. Jude grabbed the walkie talkie. "You-You-You told us they left!" "I thought.." Anthony began. "I don't care! Get Kumar NOW, JackKnife? JackKnife?" Jude exclaimed. "I'm here, and getting out." Bob replied. "C'mon, Dignan." Jude said, pulling a mask over her face and stuffing the talkie into her pocket. Dignan put on a mask and grabbed the bag. They both ran out of the room.
Chapter 20. Going back in.
Dignan and Jude ran outside and quickly ran to the van. "BOB? ANTHONY? KUMAR?" Jude yelled, looking around wildly. She fumbled with the talkie. "Anybody? Whats happening?" "Kumar's the problem! He's asleep, his walkie talkies broken, and he won't budge!" Anthony replied, worry in his voice. "Dang it!" Jude hissed. "We'll be right there. Bob?" "Yeah?" Bob voice called, but not from the walkie talkie. He was running out from the side of the building. "Wheres Kumar and Anthony?" He asked. "Stuck inside the building. I've got to go get them." Jude said. "I'm going to." Dignan said, he had spent his time jumping around the van before, but now he was by Jude. "Get out of here, Bob." Jude told him. Bob nodded and they all took off, Dignan and Jude to the storage, Bob to anyplace else.
Chapter 21. Found out.
Dignan and Jude made it to the second floor quickly, Anthony was shaking Kumar and trying to get him to wake up. Dignan ran over and quickly kicked Kumar in the side. "Ow! Whats happening?" Kumar mumbled, waking up. "We NEED to get out Kumar!" Jude exclaimed. "The people are back!" "Oh, I know." Kumar told her. "WHAT?!" Dignan screamed. "YOU KNEW? AND YOU DIDN'T TELL US?!" He turned around and started cursing a blue streak. "C'mon, we can't stay here, get out, get out, get out!" Jude exclaimed. Anthony helped Kumar and they both got onto the elevator. "This one won't hold all of us, go take the other one." Anthony told Dignan and Jude. They nodded and ran to the other side of the room, where an elevator sat. A sign on it said:
OUT OF ORDER.
"AURG!" Jude exclaimed. "Quick, down the stairs!" They both ran down the stairs as quickly as possible, once they got to the first floor Anthony and Kumar were holding three people at gun point. "Put on your masks!" Dignan exclaimed. "They called the cops, man! They called them! They saw the missing money and called them!" Anthony said, he was practically crying. "What? Go, just go!" Jude screamed. She pushed Anthony and they all ran down the hall. One of the workers attacked Dignan and pulled him down, Dignan turned punched the worker in the face, but was attacked by another. "DIGNAN!" Jude cried, turning around to go help him. Anthony turned to, but Jude yelled: "I'll get him! Take Kumar and get out!" He hestitated, but then finally ran for the exit. Jude ran over and kicked the men in the face, and took out her gun. "Get away from him!" She hissed. The workers quickly got away from Dignan, who jumped up quickly and raised his gun to. "Get to the wall look at the ceiling!" Dignan ordered. Once the workers were at the wall, they both began to leave when suddenly: "Dignan? Do you hear that?" Jude whispered, looking around. "Its sirens."
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